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이유민/2025-04-24

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Primary purpose of my trip is just eating their traditoional food. Since super market or the convenience store can show their food trend, I like going to the convenience store in that country. Especially, I think the convenience store in Japan and super market in Australia sell a lot of nice goods. And I just want to feel their own culture or mood. So I like walking their street or doing picnic in their park. Actually I like trip because I can experience something that I can't experience in daily life. And I can forget tiring things for a second

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Megan^^
Thank you for sharing.
I haven't been to Japan, but I've seen videos of their convenience stores.
It does seem like they have a lot of interesting goods.
_T. SHAY^^
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Primary purpose of my trip is just eating their traditoional food.

>>The primary purpose of my trip is to eat traditional food.

OR: What I always look forward to when traveling is eating the traditional food.

Since super market or the convenience store can show their food trend, I like going to the convenience store in that country.

>>Since supermarkets and convenience stores can show their food trend, I like going to the convenience stores in the country that I visit.

Especially, I think the convenience store in Japan and super market in Australia sell a lot of nice goods.

>>Correct
OR: From my travel experiences I came to realize that Japan's convenience stores and Australia's supermarkets sell a lot of nice goods.
And I just want to feel their own culture or mood.
>>Correct

OR: And I just want to experience their own culture or mood.

So I like walking their street or doing picnic in their park.

>>So I like walking on the streets or having picnic in the parks.

Actually I like trip because I can experience something that I can't experience in daily life.

>>Actually, I like traveling because I can experience something that I can't experience in my daily life.

And I can forget tiring things for a second

>>And I can forget the tiring things for a second.
OR: And I can keep my mind off the stressful things for a short period of time.