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Describe a time in your life when someone treated you unfairly.
박순호/2025-04-24
회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Everyone wants to be treated well by everyone. And I know very well that when people feel that I truely treat them, they will also treat me well.
I have tried to maintain good relationships with other people. However, there was a time about 15 years ago when I was treated unfairly by my boss at work and it made me sad.
At that time, I was relatively young compared to my colleagues, but I was the number one promotion in the workplace because of my good performance. Everyone expected me to be promoted, but my boss promoted someone else because I was young.
My colleagues comforted me, and I was able to get over my sadness in a short time.
Of course, after that boss retired, I was promoted right away. That's why I treat my juniors based on their abilities and performance, not their age. I hope that my older juniors don't complain that they are treated unfairly.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, Mr. Park^^
Thank you for sharing.
_T. SHAY^^
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Everyone wants to be treated well by everyone.
Thank you for sharing.
_T. SHAY^^
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Everyone wants to be treated well by everyone.
>>Correct
OR: No one wants to be treated unfairly.
OR: No one wants to be treated unfairly.
And I know very well that when people feel that I truely treat them, they will also treat me well.
>>And I know very well that when people feel that I truly treat them well, they will also treat me well.
I have tried to maintain good relationships with other people.
I have tried to maintain good relationships with other people.
>>Correct
OR: I always work hard to maintain good relationships with other people.
OR: I always work hard to maintain good relationships with other people.
However, there was a time about 15 years ago when I was treated unfairly by my boss at work and it made me sad.
>>Correct
OR: However, I experienced being treated unfairly by my boss 15 years ago, which made me sad.
At that time, I was relatively young compared to my colleagues, but I was the number one promotion in the workplace because of my good performance.
OR: However, I experienced being treated unfairly by my boss 15 years ago, which made me sad.
At that time, I was relatively young compared to my colleagues, but I was the number one promotion in the workplace because of my good performance.
>>At that time, I was relatively young compared to my colleagues, but I was the number one candidate for promotion in the workplace because of my good performance.
Everyone expected me to be promoted, but my boss promoted someone else because I was young.
>>Correct
OR: Everyone thought I would be promoted, but my boss promoted someone else instead.
My colleagues comforted me, and I was able to get over my sadness in a short time.
OR: Everyone thought I would be promoted, but my boss promoted someone else instead.
My colleagues comforted me, and I was able to get over my sadness in a short time.
>>Correct
OR: My colleagues consoled me, and it helped me get over it in a short time.
Of course, after that boss retired, I was promoted right away.
OR: My colleagues consoled me, and it helped me get over it in a short time.
Of course, after that boss retired, I was promoted right away.
>>Correct
OR: Of course, when my boss retired, I got promoted right away.
OR: Of course, when my boss retired, I got promoted right away.
That's why I treat my juniors based on their abilities and performance, not their age.
>>Correct
OR: With that experience, I treat my juniors based on their abilities and performance, not their age.
OR: With that experience, I treat my juniors based on their abilities and performance, not their age.
I hope that my older juniors don't complain that they are treated unfairly.
>>Correct
OR: I hope my older juniors don't feel like they are mistreated.
OR: I hope my older juniors don't feel like they are mistreated.
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