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The homework for 29th April.

조윤호/2025-04-29

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Q : What do you think will be the future of computers? A : In my opinion, computers would be disappeared. Since technologies for cell phone is growing fast, cell phones can substitute computers in near future. In my case, i did not use a computer except for doing video call or work. Also, i think these works can be done by cell phone already or near future. So, i think computes would be disappeared and substituted in near future.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello Eddy!
Thank you for your effort in writing this! You did a great job expressing your opinion clearly, and your ideas are easy to understand. To improve your writing, try to focus on verb tenses (like using “will” instead of “would” for future predictions) and article use (like “a computer” instead of just “computer”). Keep practicing—you’re doing great, and every time you write, you get better!
~~Teacher Kate

In my opinion, computers would be disappeared.
>>In my opinion, computers will disappear.
Since technologies for cell phone is growing fast, cell phones can substitute computers in near future.
>>Since technology for cell phones is growing fast, cell phones can substitute computers in the near future.
In my case, i did not use a computer except for doing video call or work.
>>In my case, I do not use a computer except for video calls or work.
Also, i think these works can be done by cell phone already or near future.
>>Also, I think these tasks can already be done by cell phones or will be possible in the near future.
So, i think computes would be disappeared and substituted in near future.
>>So, I think computers will disappear and be replaced in the near future.

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