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What are some things you can do to support migrant workers in your community?

김영경/2025-05-03

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Just off the top of my head, there are three things for me to do for them. Number one is to teach them Korean skills that migrant workers usually lack when they start their lives in Korea. It may take Korean language skill as well as English language skill to teach foreigners Korean language well because they don’t understand Korean. Number two is to help them rent a house by interpreting them to Korean agents. I found that foreigners felt relieved to have me when they met Korean agents. It may sound strange to hear, Korean real estate agents also looked relieved to see me beside the foreign customer. Last one that I can do for them is to give them a ride to tour attraction and tour guidance. Every weekend or holidays, they want to know about the area they live, but they need to take a public transportation to get around the area without proper knowledge or information on it. If they are provided a vehicle and native tour guide, it couldn’t be better for them.

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Hi Steve,

I am deeply moved by your answer. You have a very good heart, most especially to the migrant workers.
Thank you for answering this essay. I hope there will be more people like you in every country around the world. :)

- Teacher Elly~

Just off the top of my head, there are three things for me to do for them.

>> Just off the top of my head, there are three things I would like to do for them.

Number one is to teach them Korean skills that migrant workers usually lack when they start their lives in Korea.

>> CORRECT

OR >> Number one is to teach them Korean skills, which most migrant workers lack when they first arrive in Korea.

It may take Korean language skill as well as English language skill to teach foreigners Korean language well because they don’t understand Korean.

>> It may take Korean language skills as well as English language skills to teach foreigners the Korean language well because they don’t understand Korean.

OR >> Since foreigners don't understand Korean, teaching them the language may require both Korean and English language proficiency.

Number two is to help them rent a house by interpreting them to Korean agents.

>> Number two is to help them rent a house by interpreting for them to Korean agents.

OR >> Number two is to assist them in renting a house by interpreting for them with Korean realtors.

I found that foreigners felt relieved to have me when they met Korean agents.

>> CORRECT

OR >> I discovered that when foreigners encountered Korean agents, they were relieved to have me.

It may sound strange to hear, Korean real estate agents also looked relieved to see me beside the foreign customer.

>> It may sound strange to hear, but Korean real estate agents also looked relieved to see me beside the foreign customer.

Last one that I can do for them is to give them a ride to tour attraction and tour guidance.

>> The last one that I can do for them is to give them a ride to the tourist attraction and tour guidance.

OR >> The final thing I can do for them is offer them a ride to the tourist destination and provide tour assistance.

Every weekend or holidays, they want to know about the area they live, but they need to take a public transportation to get around the area without proper knowledge or information on it.

>> Every weekend or holiday, they want to know about the area they live in, but they need to take public transportation to get around. However, they don't have proper/necessary knowledge or information on it.

If they are provided a vehicle and native tour guide, it couldn’t be better for them.

>> CORRECT

OR >> It would be ideal if they were provided with a vehicle and a native tour guide.