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The homework for 16th May.

조윤호/2025-05-16

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Q : What would your ideal house or apartment look like? A : My ideal house is a very huge apartment. As i am living in one room, i want to live in a huge house. Also, i want to live in a new-built house. Since a house that i lived previous was a old house, it had many defects. So, i want to live in a huge and new built apartment.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Eddy!

Thank you for sharing your ideas! You described your dream home well. Just a quick tip: try to use more natural word choices like “large” instead of “huge” in formal writing, and watch word forms like “newly built” instead of “new built.” Great job—keep practicing!

~~Teacher Kate

My ideal house is a very huge apartment.

>>CORRECT!

>>OR: My ideal house is a very large apartment.
As i am living in one room, i want to live in a huge house.

>>As I am living in a one-room place, I want to live in a spacious home.

Also, i want to live in a new-built house.

>>Also, I want to live in a newly built house.

Since a house that i lived previous was a old house, it had many defects.

>>Since the house I previously lived in was old, it had many defects.

So, i want to live in a huge and new built apartment.

>>So, I want to live in a large, newly built apartment.