[My original writing] I hope to take a practical and hard class for IELTS test. I want to answer the questions spontaneously and naturally in the real test based on the prepared ideas of the question sheets that I made. I think it would be not easy to get a targeted score because I have to acquire the score in July, or at least, up to August. But I will try my best in your class with a passionate attitude. If you have better plans for it, I will conform with you. After the exam, I hope to keep learning English not just for the test, but for a daily use with you. I wish to be accustomed to speaking English fluently someday.

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I hope to take a practical and hard class for IELTS test. 

>> I hope to take a practical and hard class to prepare me for the IELTS test.

I want to answer the questions spontaneously and naturally in the real test based on the prepared ideas of the question sheets that I made. 

>> Correct

I think it would be not easy to get a targeted score because I have to acquire the score in July, or at least, up to August. 

>> I think it would not be easy to get a targeted score because I have to acquire the score in July, or at least, up to August. 

But I will try my best in your class with a passionate attitude. 

>> However, I will try my best in your class with a passionate attitude. 

If you have better plans for it, I will conform with you. 

>> If you have better plans, I will conform to them.

After the exam, I hope to keep learning English not just for the test, but for a daily use with you. 

>> After the exam, I hope to keep learning English with you not just for the test, but for daily use.

I wish to be accustomed to speaking English fluently someday.

>> Correct