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Do you think that your country is changing rapidly?

이진태/2025-06-10

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My country has changed rapidly, however it's not a good changing. The birth rate in Korea has decreased rapidly last few years. The number of children in elementary school is lower alomst 70% than my ages. It is bad news for Korea.

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~~Teacher Ryka^^

My country has changed rapidly, however it's not a good changing.
>> My country has changed rapidly, but not in a good way.
OR >> Korea has undergone rapid changes, but unfortunately, not for the better.

The birth rate in Korea has decreased rapidly last few years.
>> The birth rate in Korea has dropped significantly over the past few years.

The number of children in elementary school is lower alomst 70% than my ages.
>> The number of children in elementary school is almost 70% lower compared to when I was their age.

It is bad news for Korea.
>> CORRECT
OR >> This is a concerning trend for the future of the country.