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How is our accent affected by our birthplace?

이복희/2025-06-18

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I think that my birthplace affected all my life. My birthplace was my hometown and made my childhood. The person who have good childhood is same to have good weapon. When I was hard time, I could ride out from there. Because I have positive mind. My childhood made me positive person. I went to the school by walk. We did a lot of activity without study. We have done something unthinkable these days. I can't forget these happy memory.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Good morning, Ms. Eva!
If we go back in the past, most people had a hard time living. However, this experience paved the way for us to become a better and stronger generation. People these days are described as a weak generation. They try to give up and quit if things do not go their way. I hope that there will be a situation that will make them stronger and more resilient.
See you in class!
Aki~


I think that my birthplace affected all my life. 
>>>  I think that my birthplace affected my whole life. 

My birthplace was my hometown and made my childhood.
>>> My birthplace was my hometown, which made my childhood.

The person who have good childhood is same to have good weapon.
>>> A person who has a good childhood is like someone who has a good weapon.

When I was hard time, I could ride out from there. Because I have positive mind. My childhood made me positive person.
>>> When I had a hard time, I could ride it out. I have a positive mindset. My childhood made me a positive person.

I went to the school by walk.
>>> I went to school on foot.

We did a lot of activity without study.
>>>   We did a lot of activities without studying.

We have done something unthinkable these days.
>>> CORRECT!

I can't forget these happy memory.
>>>  I can't forget these happy memories.
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