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When was the last time you went to the beach? What activities can people do at the beach?

김일환/2025-06-19

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I went to the beach with my friends a year ago, in June. It was a hot, sunny hot day, but I didn't go swimming at the beach. I don't know how to swim. So, when I go to the beach, I play beach volleyball, and walking along the beach. After sweating, I jumped into the sea. That is only thing I do at the beach.

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Good evening, Hwanny!^^

Beach vacations are good for your brain. Spending time at the beach can boost happiness, lower stress levels, and possibly improve cognitive performance. The sights, sounds, and scents of the beach can promote awareness and relaxation in a soothing and restorative way.

Practice English whenever you can. Have a good night!

__T. Mayleen :)

I went to the beach with my friends a year ago, in June.

>>> CORRECT

>>> OR: I went to the beach with my pals last June.

It was a hot, sunny hot day, but I didn't go swimming at the beach.

>>> It was a hot, sunny day, but I didn't go swimming at the beach.

I don't know how to swim. So, when I go to the beach, I play beach volleyball, and walking along the beach.

>>> I don't know how to swim, so when I go to the beach, I play beach volleyball and walk along the beach.

After sweating, I jumped into the sea. That is only thing I do at the beach.

>>> After sweating, I would jump into the sea. That is the only thing I do at the beach.