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권경희/2025-06-20

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Even though some people are rich, most of us have limited budget. In my case, when I spend money I use it according to important order in my family. For example, the first rank is studying abroad tuition and living expenses for daughters until now.
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Hello, Ms. Lily!
I agree, no matter how rich a person may be, they should consider managing their funds or budget, especially since life is temporary. Maybe for Elon Musk or Bill Gates, they have a different way of management, but I believe that they also have to consider this matter.
See you!
Aki

Even though some people are rich, most of us have limited budget.
>>> Even though some people are rich, most of us have a limited budget.

In my case, when I spend money I use it according to important order in my family.
>>> In my case, when I spend money, I use it according to what our family prioritizes.

For example, the first rank is studying abroad tuition and living expenses for daughters until now.
>>> For example, the priority is studying abroad tuition, and living expenses for my daughters until now.
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