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권경희/2025-06-23

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
The babies are not things that we throw away. Of course the government and social welfare systems protect women who facing could not to raise their babies in situation. But we teach young people that even loving should need responsibility. You should think the baby's scar and longing for the rest of his life. I can understand parent's heart opposing to giving birth outside of marriage of their children.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Ms. Lily!
The last resort for women who might be judged is to put the babies in this box.  I cannot blame them if they put the baby under the care of someone whom they think can raise the baby well. However, responsible love and parenthood must be taught to our young people nowadays. This program is beneficial, but it may be disadvantageous in some ways.
Aki~


The babies are not things that we throw away.
>>>  The babies are not things that we have to throw away.

Of course the government and social welfare systems protect women who facing could not to raise their babies in situation.
>>>  Of course, the government and social welfare systems protect women who face difficulties in raising their babies in situation.

But we teach young people that even loving should need responsibility.
>>>   But we teach young people that even love should need responsibility.

You should think the baby's scar and longing for the rest of his life.
>>> You should think about the baby's scar and longing for the rest of his life.

I can understand parent's heart opposing to giving birth outside of marriage of their children.
>>> I can understand parents' hearts opposing giving birth outside of marriage to their children.
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