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Rest day.

조영진/2025-06-23

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Today is Sunday. It's weekend. It's wind and cloud. Last night, Juhee came to my home. because we drunk wine. She arrived at 6:00. and She leaved at 11:15. We play long time. We were talking about our children, husband, parents, parents in low... We had a lot. So, today is very tired. I and My children rested. At 4:00 We leaved home. because My son(hajun) had a baseball game. His team losed. And today restart power English. I need studing English. I have to studing English.!!!!! I will study hard!!!! fighting!!!
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Good evening, Yeong Jin! ^^,)

Thank you so much for this composition.
I've read it well, and I have made some modifications.

I will call you later at 22:00 for our first class. I hope you'll accept the Zoom invite soon!^^
I hope you're having a good day.

See you later!

__T. Mayleen :)


Today is Sunday. It's weekend.
It's wind and cloud.
>>> Today is Sunday. It's the weekend.
It's windy and cloudy.

Last night, Juhee came to my home. because we drunk wine.
She arrived at 6:00. and She leaved at 11:15.
We play long time.
We were talking about our children, husband, parents, parents in low...
We had a lot.
So, today is very tired.
I and My children rested.
>>> Last night, Juhee came to my home, and we drank wine.
She arrived at 6:00 in the evening and left at 11:15 p.m.
We played for a long time. We talked about our children, husbands, parents, and parents-in-law.
We had a lot, so it was very tiring.
After that, my children and I rested.

At 4:00 We leaved home. because My son(hajun) had a baseball game.
His team losed.
>>> At 4:00 we left home. because my son, Hajun, had a baseball game.
His team lost.

And today restart power English.
>>> And today, I will restart with Power English.

I need studing English. I have to studing English.!!!!!
>>> I need to study English. I have to study English!

I will study hard!!!! fighting!!!
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: I will study hard. Fighting!
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