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If you could change one thing about your warehouse what would it be ?

오혜영/2025-06-25

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

If you could change one thing about your warehouse what would it be ? If I could change one thing in my work, I'd like to say that it is dust and temperature. As you know, I'm always easily getting colder than other people. So, I have to wear a jacket and sometimes feel my knees ahce as I'm getting older and older. However I know the products are very important than my knees in an aspect of my company. The other one is dust. There is a lot of it in the warehouse. It can't be seen easily. But I can feel from my nose and cough.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Stella,

As always, thank you for taking the time to answer this essay. 🙂
I hope the issues at your workplace, especially the dust, can be addressed soon.
Please stay healthy and always take care at work!
Wishing you a less tiring day tomorrow. See you in our class. 😊

- Teacher Elly~

If I could change one thing in my work, I'd like to say that it is dust and temperature.

>> If I could change one thing about my work, I’d say it’s the dust and the temperature.

OR >> If I could change one thing about our warehouse, I’d say it’s the dust and the temperature.

As you know, I'm always easily getting colder than other people.
>> As you know, I get cold more easily than other people.

So, I have to wear a jacket and sometimes feel my knees ahce as I'm getting older and older.
>> So, I have to wear a jacket, and sometimes I feel my knees ache as I get older.

However I know the products are very important than my knees in an aspect of my company.
>> However, I understand that the products are more important than my knees from the company’s perspective.

The other one is dust. There is a lot of it in the warehouse.

>> CORRECT
OR >> The other issue is dust. There’s a lot of it in the warehouse.

It can't be seen easily. But I can feel from my nose and cough.

>> It can't be seen easily, but I can feel it in my nose and start coughing.