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The homework for 1st July.

조윤호/2025-07-01

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Q : What are three things you want to purchase for yourself? A : The first one is a home. I want to have my own home. But the price of housing in Korea is very expensive. The second one is a laptop computer. As my job requires a lot of business trips, a laptop computer is very helpful for me. And the last one is a Tablet PC. Since I like to lying on the bed, a Tablet PC, especially LG stand by me would be convenient for me.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good evening, Eddy! ^^,)

"If you want to buy something, work for it" highlights the importance of achieving your goals with hard work and perseverance. Instead of depending on outside forces or immediate satisfaction, it encourages the notion that obtaining things should be the consequence of your own diligence. By promoting financial responsibility and postponing gratification, this idea aids people in strengthening their work ethics and becoming more frugal with their expenditures.

Thank you so much for answering your homework. Have a good night!^^

__T. Mayleen :)

The first one is a home.
I want to have my own home. But the price of housing in Korea is very expensive.

>>> The first one is a house. I want to have my own home, but the housing price in Korea is very expensive.
The second one is a laptop computer.
As my job requires a lot of business trips, a laptop computer is very helpful for me.

>>> CORRECT

>>> OR: The second one is a laptop computer. As my job includes a lot of business trips, a laptop computer is very helpful to me.

And the last one is a Tablet PC.
Since I like to lying on the bed, a Tablet PC, especially LG stand by me would be convenient for me.

>>> And the last one is a tablet PC. Since I like to lie on the bed, a tablet PC, especially the LG Stand By Me, would be convenient for me.