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What does a happy life look like? What would you need to do to be happy?

최정희/2025-07-07

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Becoming happy is very simple and complicated in our life. The first step of being happy is that accept our selves without any prejudice and complaint. Because we are very sad and suffer when we start to comparison our lives and others. Second step is that we have to set a goal. It doesn't matter the goal's size small and tiny. When we accomplish the goal we can feel happy and get a power to go forward for the future. It is very meaningful to image the future. The future's meaning is going to next step. We can feel happy whenever move to next step and when we go back the steps which we have passed we can have hope and it encourages us to do something for our lives.

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Thank you for this Lydia? Keep them coming. See you in class.

Becoming happy is very simple and complicated in our life.

>>> Becoming happy is very simple and also complicated in our lives.

The first step of being happy is that accept our selves without any prejudice and complaint. Because we are very sad and suffer when we start to comparison our lives and others.

>>> The first step of being happy is to accept ourselves without any prejudice and complaint, because we would be very sad and suffer when we start to compare our lives and others.

Second step is that we have to set a goal.

>>> The second step is that we have to set a goal.

It doesn't matter the goal's size small and tiny.

>>> It doesn't matter if the goal's size is small and tiny.

When we accomplish the goal we can feel happy and get a power to go forward for the future.

>>> OR: When we accomplish the goal, we can feel happy and get energized to go forward for the future.

It is very meaningful to image the future.

>>> correct

The future's meaning is going to next step.

>>> The future means going to the next step.

We can feel happy whenever move to next step and when we go back the steps which we have passed we can have hope and it encourages us to do something for our lives.

>>> We can feel happy whenever we move to the next step and when we go back to previous steps which we have passed, we can have hope and it encourages us to do something for our lives.