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이유민/2025-07-07

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My mother was in a car accident. When she was around same age as me, a bike hit her surprisingly. Her legs was broken and she had to get the operation. She still has very big scars in her legs and limps slightly. I've never been in a car accident, but I just fall down at the second floor in a bus. I just went upstair, and the bus driver twisted handle in a rush. He felt sorry for me and gave me his phone number.
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Hi, Megan^^
Thank you for sharing.
Your mom's experience must've been awful.
_T. SHAY^^
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My mother was in a car accident. 
>>Correct
OR: My mother was involved in a car accident.
When she was around same age as me, a bike hit her surprisingly. 
>>When she was around the same age as me, she was hit by a bike unexpectedly.
Her legs was broken and she had to get the operation. 
>>Her legs were broken and she had to get an operation.
OR: She broke her legs and had to have surgery.
She still has very big scars in her legs and limps slightly. 
>>She still has very big scars on her legs and limps slightly. 
I've never been in a car accident, but I just fall down at the second floor in a bus. 
>>I've never been in a car accident, but I just fell down on the second floor of a bus. 
I just went upstair, and the bus driver twisted handle in a rush. 
>>I had just gone upstairs when the bus driver twisted handle in a rush. 
He felt sorry for me and gave me his phone number.
>>Correct
OR: He felt bad for me and gave me his phone number.

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