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Do you think people today are more stressed at work than in the past? why?

오혜영/2025-07-08

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I think these days people have a lot of types of job. So,they can choose their job what they want to.Except me. According to an article, many young people quit their job easily. In my opinion, The reason is that they doesn’t need to patience,like hard work or situations that they can’t endure. I believe this phenomenone is not bad. I feel like our health is more important than other ones these days.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Stella,
As always, thank you for taking the time to respond to this essay. 😊
I agree with you, health is the most important aspect of our lives.
We should take good care of ourselves and always prioritize our health.

See you in a bit! 😊

- Teacher Elly~

I think these days people have a lot of types of job.

>> I think these days, people have many different types of jobs.

So,they can choose their job what they want to.Except me.

>> So they can choose the job they want, except me.

According to an article, many young people quit their job easily.
>> According to an article, many young people quit their jobs easily.

In my opinion, The reason is that they doesn’t need to patience,like hard work or situations that they can’t endure.
>> In my opinion, the reason is that they don't have patience for hard work or difficult situations.

I believe this phenomenone is not bad.

>> I believe this phenomenon is not bad.

I feel like our health is more important than other ones these days.

>> I feel like our health is more important than anything else these days.