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How do we solve the problem of poverty?

이복희/2025-07-15

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My country have these proverb. "Even a king can't solved one's poverty" We thought that it was hard things. But now a days I think that we can solve it. When I was young, I worked and got a salary every month. I saved money every month at bank. I spend money after save money. I saved money long time, later we can saved a lot of money, we bought a house and car. I think that the vest way to solve poverty is saving money. Let's save money.
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My country have these proverb.
>>My country has this proverb.
"Even a king can't solved one's poverty"
>>"Even a king can't solve one's poverty"
We thought that it was hard things. 
>>We thought that it was a hard thing.
But now a days I think that we can solve it. 
>>However, I think we can solve it nowadays.
When I was young, I worked and got a salary every month. 
>>correct
I saved money every month at bank. 
>>I saved money every month at the bank.
I spend money after save money. 
>>I spend money after saving money. 
I saved money long time, later we can saved a lot of money, we bought a house and car. 
>>I saved money for a long time, later we saved a lot of money, we bought a house and a car.
I think that the vest way to solve poverty is saving money.
>>I think that the best way to solve poverty is to save money.
Let's save money.
>>correct
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