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The homework for 16th July.

조윤호/2025-07-17

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Q : Is it possible to ever have a truly hack-proof system? A : In my opinion, that is impossible. During a hack-proof system is getting better, a hacking system is also improving. And, as i mentioned at our last class, Korean companies do not considering e-security system much. Even though they are big companies and government companies, I saw many news about hacking. So, I think that a truly hack-proof system is impossible at least in Korea.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Eddy,
Thank you for taking the time to respond to this essay. :)
I sincerely hope that Korean corporations and government agencies will give this issue the attention it deserves. Strengthening cybersecurity is essential for the safety and well-being of the people of South Korea.

Thank you for attending tonight's class. See you again tomorrow. ^^
- Teacher Elly~

A : In my opinion, that is impossible.

>> CORRECT

During a hack-proof system is getting better, a hacking system is also improving.

>> While hack-proof systems are improving, hacking techniques are also evolving.

And, as i mentioned at our last class, Korean companies do not considering e-security system much.

>> And, as I mentioned in our last class, Korean companies do not consider e-security systems very much.

Even though they are big companies and government companies, I saw many news about hacking.

>> Even though they are large corporations and government agencies, I’ve seen a lot of news about hacking.

So, I think that a truly hack-proof system is impossible at least in Korea.

>> CORRECT