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Does being famous generally mean that someone is wealthy or living a glamorous lifestyle?

김재서/2025-07-29

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I think being famous usually means living a rich life. First, money naturally follows fame. You can earn through ads, sponsorships, and more. Second, famous people get special treatment like free stuff or VIP invites, which makes life more glamorous. That’s why I believe fame often leads to wealth.
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                Does being famous generally mean that someone is wealthy or living a glamorous lifestyle?



I think being famous usually means living a rich life.
>>> OR: Being famous often equates to living a life of wealth and privilege.
>>> OR: Many people assume that fame guarantees a rich and comfortable life.

First, money naturally follows fame. You can earn through ads, sponsorships, and more.
>>> OR: To start, fame often leads to financial gain through advertisements, sponsorships, and various income streams.
>>> OR: Fame commonly results in increased earning potential via sponsorships, promotional contracts, and related channels

Second, famous people get special treatment like free stuff or VIP invites, which makes life more glamorous. That’s why I believe fame often leads to wealth.
>>> OR: Second, famous individuals often receive special perks, such as complimentary products and exclusive event access, which adds glamour to their lifestyle. That’s why I believe fame frequently leads to wealth.
>>> OR: The benefits of fame go beyond money; it’s the VIP experiences and exclusive treatment that make life more glamorous. That’s why I think fame and wealth are closely connected.

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