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Do hagwons widen the education gap between rich and poor students? How?

김유진/2025-07-31

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In my opinion, academies are the main reason of widen gap of rich and poor student’s education. Academies are expensive and it’s not affordable for poor students .Since all the rich students are pre-learning in the academy, public schools’s teacher think everyone already learned in Academy. But in reality, poor students never learned it. But because public schools are skipping or teaching roughly, poor students didn’t had a chance to learn it. So academies are the main problem of widen gap of rich and poor students education.

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Thank you for this Eugene! I always appreciate the effort you put in doing your homework. Keep it up!

In my opinion, academies are the main reason of widen gap of rich and poor student’s education.

>>> In my opinion, academies are the main reason for the widening gap between rich and poor students in education.

Academies are expensive and it’s not affordable for poor students.

>>> correct

Since all the rich students are pre-learning in the academy, public schools’s teacher think everyone already learned in Academy.

>>> Since many rich students are learning in advance at academies, public school teachers often assume that everyone has already studied the material.

But in reality, poor students never learned it.

>>> correct

But because public schools are skipping or teaching roughly, poor students didn’t had a chance to learn it.

>>> Because public schools tend to skip or teach the lessons quickly, poor students don't get the chance to properly learn.

So academies are the main problem of widen gap of rich and poor students education.

>>> This is why academies are a major cause of the growing gap in educational opportunity between rich and poor students.