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권경희/2025-08-07

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If I were I don't want to live in Hong Kong even there is a hub of the grobal fanancial market I regard circumstance of living asl very important factor in my life. I hate exaggeratede cities with lighting specially in the night. So It is impossible for me to become rich.
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Hi Ms. Lily!
Unfortunately, we were not able to talk about this today. Maybe we can do it on Monday.
See you!
Aki~

If I were I don't want to live in Hong Kong even there is a hub of the grobal fanancial market.
>>> If I were I don't want to live in Hong Kong, even though it is a hub of the global financial market.

I regard circumstance of living asl very important factor in my life.
>>> I regard the circumstances of living as a very important factor in my life.

I hate exaggeratede cities with lighting specially in the night.
>>> I hate exaggerated cities with lighting, especially at night.

So It is impossible for me to become rich.
>>> So, it is impossible for me to become rich.
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