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What was the most memorable trip you took during your childhood, and why do you remember it so well?

오혜영/2025-08-07

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What was the most memorable trip you took during your childhood, and why do you remember it so well? When I was a child, my parents don’t have good frendship each other. However, I remember the story. It was not a type of trip. There was a stream in front of my house. Suddenly, my father said that we could go fishing to the stream. So our family went for fishing in there. I pushed the fishes into korean black plastic bag. But the bag was ripped from the sharp thing. I was upset because I thought I might gave a lecture from my parents. But they didn’t do that. I was happy.It was not about gaving a lecture,but they was frendly each other. So I want to get along with my husband friendly for my son.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Stella,

Good evening, and thank you for taking the time to answer this question.~^^
This is such a heartwarming story. I truly appreciate you sharing it with me.

I hope you and your husband continue to get along well, so your son can grow up in a warm and loving environment.
Thank you for your time tonight. Have a lovely weekend!~^^

- Teacher Elly~

When I was a child, my parents don’t have good frendship each other.

>> When I was a child, my parents didn’t have a good relationship with each other.

However, I remember the story.
>> CORRECT (grammatically)

OR >> However, I remember that moment/story clearly.

OR >> I still remember the story clearly up to this day.

It was not a type of trip. There was a stream in front of my house.
>> It wasn’t really a trip. There was just a stream in front of our house.

Suddenly, my father said that we could go fishing to the stream. So our family went for fishing in there.

>> Suddenly, my father said that we could go fishing at the stream, so our family went there together.

OR >> Suddenly, my father suggested we go fishing at the stream, so our family went there together.

I pushed the fishes into korean black plastic bag. But the bag was ripped from the sharp thing.

>> I put the fish into a black Korean plastic bag, but it got ripped by something sharp.

I was upset because I thought I might gave a lecture from my parents. But they didn’t do that.
>> I was upset because I thought I might get a lecture from my parents, but they didn’t."

OR >> I was upset because I thought my parents would scold me, but they didn’t.

I was happy.It was not about gaving a lecture,but they was frendly each other.

>> I was happy. It wasn’t about scolding me; it was more about them being friendly with each other.

OR >> I was happy not because I avoided being scolded, but because they were being friendly with each other.

So I want to get along with my husband friendly for my son.

>> So I want to have a good relationship with my husband for the sake of my son.

OR >> I want to get along well with my husband so our son can grow up in a loving environment.