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My most memorable travel experience

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When I was a 11th, I went to Jeju do with My mom, aunt, and my brother. There was so beatiful!, and the sea is so transparent.
The first day, I went to the sea, Unlike Korea, the sea was emerald-colored. There was no trash, no dust, and nothing dirty like ink.I swam, and get a cold, but It was fun at that time.
The second day, I went to restaurent, the name of that restaurent was "Yeondon", Cook made a Pork cutlet, and noodles. that was so soft and delicious! We went cafe name of "One and Only", I drank mango juice, my brother ate cake, my mother and aunt drank a cup of coffee. I like Jeiu do, because Jeiu do's food are so special, and unique.
It was so dizzy, because of cury road, but it was exicted. I ate delicious food, and played much, so I was happt enough, It was most memorable travel experience!

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Hello there Maria! It is so wonderful to see you here on this page.

I must say you write and express yourself so well in a composition. I can see how beautiful and rich your experience was in Jeju Do when you went there. I hope that you can share your experiences again the next time you go there.

This essay is very good and rich in ideas. Write more and see you in class. Good job!

-T. Donna =)

When I was a 11th, I went to Jeju do with My mom, aunt, and my brother. There was so beatiful!, and the sea is so transparent.
>> When I was 11, I went to Jeju Do with My mom, aunt, and my brother. There, it was so beautiful! The sea is so transparent.

The first day, I went to the sea, Unlike Korea, the sea was emerald-colored. There was no trash, no dust, and nothing dirty like ink.I swam, and get a cold, but It was fun at that time.
>> On the first day, I went to the sea. Unlike Korea, the sea was emerald-colored. There was no trash, no dust, and nothing dirty like ink. I swam, and got cold, but it was fun at that time.

The second day, I went to restaurent, the name of that restaurent was "Yeondon", Cook made a Pork cutlet, and noodles. that was so soft and delicious! We went cafe name of "One and Only", I drank mango juice, my brother ate cake, my mother and aunt drank a cup of coffee. I like Jeiu do, because Jeiu do's food are so special, and unique.
>> On the second day, I went to a restaurant. The name of that restaurant is "Yeondon". The cook made a pork cutlet, and noodles. That was so soft and delicious! We went to a cafe named "One and Only". I drank mango juice while my brother ate a cake. My mother and aunt drank a cup of coffee. I like Jeiu do, because its food are so special and unique.

It was so dizzy, because of cury road, but it was exicted. I ate delicious food, and played much, so I was happt enough, It was most memorable travel experience!
>> I felt so dizzy, because of the curvy road, but it was exciting. I ate delicious food, and played much so I was happy enough. It was the most memorable travel experience!
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