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I like the Youtube.
In Youtube anyone who want to make contents can do it. So we can view various contents like cooking, traveling, styling ...
And Contents of video are natural and interesting.  Sometimes I cannot stop watching Youtube. If I can control watching well, it is good window of communication.

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Hi there Ji Eun!
Thank you for answering!
I hope you enjoy your day!

I like the Youtube.
>>I like using YouTube.

In Youtube anyone who want to make contents can do it.
>>In YouTube, anyone who wants to make contents can do it. 

 So we can view various contents like cooking, traveling, styling ...
>>We can view various contents like cooking, traveling and styling.

And Contents of video are natural and interesting.  
>>The contents of the video are natural and interesting.

Sometimes I cannot stop watching YouTube.
>>CORRECT

 If I can control watching well, it is good window of communication.
>>If I can control watching it, it is good window of communication.
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