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I didn't like to listen to music, but now I love it. because I always go out with my friends and hang out with them, so I didn't have any time to listen to music before. however, nowadays I stay alone because of COVID-19, so I like listening to music on my time.
Also, I love doing exercise. I'm good at sports anything since I was young.
Finally, I like reading books. reading something makes me comfortable. It feels relax like resting.

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Hello Hannah!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I didn't like to listen to music, but now I love it. 

>> I didn't like to listen to music before, but now I love it. 

because I always go out with my friends and hang out with them, so I didn't have any time to listen to music before. 

>> It's because I always go out with my friends and hang out with them, so I didn't have any time to listen to music before. 

however, nowadays I stay alone because of COVID-19, so I like listening to music on my time.

>> However, nowadays, I stay home alone because of COVID-19, so I like listening to music on my free time.

Also, I love doing exercise. 

>> CORRECT!

I'm good at sports anything since I was young.

>> I'm good at any sports since I was young.
Finally, I like reading books. reading something makes me comfortable. 

>> Finally, I like reading books. reading something makes me feel comfortable. 

It feels relax like resting.

>> It feels relaxing like resting.

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