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Write about the strangest superstitious belief in your country?

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The strongest superstitious belief in my country is that dead ancestor who is dead comes back in the day they dead. So, Korean people gather in the day and prepare for foods. Almost 30 foods are prepared in that day. And wait until the dead ancestor come and eat food. It is our superstitious belief.

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Hi there, Kai!

Here's your edited homework! Catch you next week!

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Jean~~

The strongest superstitious belief in my country is that dead ancestor who is dead comes back in the day they dead.
>> The strangest superstitious belief in my country is that dead ancestors would visit the living on their death anniversaries. 

 So, Korean people gather in the day and prepare for foods. 
>>  So, Korean people gather on that day and prepare foods for the dead. 

Almost 30 foods are prepared in that day. And wait until the dead ancestor come and eat food. 
>> Almost 30 different foods are prepared for that day and wait until the dead ancestor comes and eats the food. 

It is our superstitious belief.
>> This is one of our superstitious beliefs.

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