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Where would you like to go for your next trip? Why?

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I want to go to Paris, France.
because I watched drama 'Emily in Paris' at before. It make attractive me.
In addition, I watched movie ' Midnight In Paris' too. In this movie, you can see an atmospheric night street in Paris.
another place is Japan. Because I like the Japanese mood. and I want to go to the hot spring 'Ginzan Onsen'.
Anyway, I want to go everywhere right now. It make me bored that I stay at home all day.

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Hello Yun Jeong,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

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Where would you like to go for your next trip? Why?

I want to go to Paris, France.
because I watched drama 'Emily in Paris' at before. 
>>> I want to go to Paris, France because I watched the drama 'Emily in Paris' and I want to see it. 

It make attractive me.
>>> It looks very attractive for me. 

In addition, I watched movie ' Midnight In Paris' too. 
>>> In addition, I also watched the movie ' Midnight In Paris'. 

In this movie, you can see an atmospheric night street in Paris.
>>> CORRECT

another place is Japan. Because I like the Japanese mood. and I want to go to the hot spring 'Ginzan Onsen'.
>>> I also like to go to Japan because I like the Japanese mood and I want to go to 'Ginzan Onsen' hot spring.

Anyway, I want to go everywhere right now. 
>>> CORRECT

It make me bored that I stay at home all day.
>>> It makes me feel bored to just stay at home for the whole day. 
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