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The qualities to be a nice friend

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Everyone wants to have a best friend. Then, what qualities are needed to be a good friend? Each person answers differently, but here's my opinion.
First, to be a great friend, you should listen to your friend carefully. Listening is more important than speaking. If you listen to your friend sincerely, your friend will think that you respect him or her.
Second, you should have the ability to sympathize with your friend. Sympathizing with your friend would help you to keep a friendship. It is related to listening skills. If you don't listen to your friend carefully, sincere sympathy will become impossible.
Lastly, you should have similar interests with your friend. If you don't have similar concerns with your friend, it is hard to understand your friend.
Those three things that I suggest seem easy to be a nice friend. However, it takes a lot of effort to be the best friend of someone.

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I must agree with your opinion, Mina! I know you will always be a good friend to someone. Thank you for your wonderful ideas! -Faith-
Everyone wants to have a best friend.
>> CORRECT
Then, what qualities are needed to be a good friend? 
>> CORRECT
OR: So, how can we be a good friend?
Each person answers differently, but here's my opinion.
>> Each person answers differently, but here are my opinions.
First, to be a great friend, you should listen to your friend carefully. 
>> First, to be a great friend, you must pay attention to what your friend is saying.
Listening is more important than speaking. 
>> CORRECT
If you listen to your friend sincerely, your friend will think that you respect him or her.
>> CORRECT
OR: Your friend will think you hold him/her in high regard if you listen to him intently.
Second, you should have the ability to sympathize with your friend. 
>> CORRECT
Sympathizing with your friend would help you to keep a friendship. 
>> CORRECT
It is related to listening skills. 
>> CORRECT
OR: It has something to do with listening skills.
If you don't listen to your friend carefully, sincere sympathy will become impossible.
>> CORRECT
Lastly, you should have similar interests with your friend. 
>> CORRECT
OR: Finally, you should have some things in common.
If you don't have similar concerns with your friend, it is hard to understand your friend.
>> If you don't have similar concerns with your friend, it is hard to understand him/her.
Those three things that I suggest seem easy to be a nice friend. 
>> CORRECT
However, it takes a lot of effort to be the best friend of someone.
>> CORRECT
OR: However, it requires a lot of effort to be someone's best friend.
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