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In the near future, the corona virus will be over. Then, I¡¯m looking forward to traveling abroad with my family. As my younger sister became a college student this year, our family can travel far more freely than before. Therefore, we will visit many historical sites in the world and have some delicious food. Also, after graduating from the university, I¡¯m looking forward to having a job. To be honest, I¡¯m considering many jobs that I could have with my major. I¡¯m sure that there will be many stressful situations when I work as an employee, but it will be really worthy to earn money by myself.

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Good morning Min Ji! 
Yes, I agree with you! 
Making money alone is worth it! 
All jobs are difficult, you just have to find the job that suits you or your passion.
So that you won't feel like your working. A work that is just like another hobby. ^^
Thanks for doing your homework. ^^ 

In the near future, the corona virus will be over. 
>>> CORRECT! 
OR: In the near future, the coronavirus will end.
Then, I¡¯m looking forward to traveling abroad with my family. 
>>> CORRECT! 
As my younger sister became a college student this year, our family can travel far more freely than before. 
>>> CORRECT!
OR: As my sister became a university student this year, my family is able to travel much more freely than before.
Therefore, we will visit many historical sites in the world and have some delicious food. 
>>> CORRECT! 
Also, after graduating from the university, I¡¯m looking forward to having a job. 
>>> CORRECT! 
OR: Also, after graduating from college, I'm looking forward to getting a job.
To be honest, I¡¯m considering many jobs that I could have with my major. 
>>> CORRECT! 
I¡¯m sure that there will be many stressful situations when I work as an employee, but it will be really worthy to earn money by myself. 
>>> CORRECT! 
OR: I'm sure working as an employee will be stressful, but making money alone will be worth it.

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