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If you could time travel in your past, where would you like to visit? Why?

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If i could time travel in my past, first, i will go to when I was very young.
And i will say to my parents that allow your daughter's art when she is young.
Second, i will go to when Bitcoin before.
After than buy the Bitcoin whole of my money.

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If you could time travel in your past, where would you like to visit? Why?

If i could time travel in my past, first, i will go to when I was very young.
>>> If I could time travel in my past, then I'll first go back to the time when I was young. 

And i will say to my parents that allow your daughter's art when she is young.
>>> And I will say to my parents that they should allow their daughter to enroll in arts while she is still young. 

Second, i will go to when Bitcoin before.
>>> Second, I will invest in Bitcoin. 

After than buy the Bitcoin whole of my money.
>>>  After that I'll buy Bitcoin with my own money. 
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