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If you could time travel in your past, where would you like to visit? Why?

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If i could time travel in my past, first, i will go to when I was very young.
And i will say to my parents that allow your daughter's art when she is young.
Second, i will go to when Bitcoin before.
After than buy the Bitcoin whole of my money.

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Hello Yun Jeong,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work! 

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)



If you could time travel in your past, where would you like to visit? Why?

If i could time travel in my past, first, i will go to when I was very young.
>>> If I could time travel in my past, then I'll first go back to the time when I was young. 

And i will say to my parents that allow your daughter's art when she is young.
>>> And I will say to my parents that they should allow their daughter to enroll in arts while she is still young. 

Second, i will go to when Bitcoin before.
>>> Second, I will invest in Bitcoin. 

After than buy the Bitcoin whole of my money.
>>>  After that I'll buy Bitcoin with my own money. 
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