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Tangerine tea on Jeju : A sip of comport

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Jeju is famous for many stones, strong winds and women.
As a result of volcanic activities in the past, many stones can be easily seen in Jeju.
Jeju is a big island, which is surrounded by sea on all sides.
This geographic feature causes strong winds to blow.
In addition, women from Jeju are considered strong as some of them are professional female divers who dive into the deep sea to collect seafood.
The female divers' lives are not easy because it is very challenging to stop breathing for a long time or to go into the cold water especially in winter.
The last thing that I want to introduce about Jeju is a tangerine.
It is a round orange-colored fruit, which tastes sweet.
It looks like a smaller version of an orange, but in my personal opinion, tangerines are much delicious that oranges.
Tangerines trees are everywhere in Jeju. That's probably Jeju is a suitable place where tangerines grow well thanks to its warm weather.
I haven't seen tangerines in other countries.

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I always appreciate your effort to make your own summary, Jiny! You made another great work! -Faith-
Jeju is famous for many stones, strong winds and women.
>> CORRECT
OR: Jeju is well known for many stones, strong winds and women.
As a result of volcanic activities in the past, many stones can be easily seen in Jeju.
>> CORRECT
Jeju is a big island, which is surrounded by sea on all sides.
>> It is a big island, which is surrounded by sea on all sides.
This geographic feature causes strong winds to blow.
>> CORRECT
In addition, women from Jeju are considered strong as some of them are professional female divers who dive into the deep sea to collect seafood.
>> In addition, women from Jeju are considered strong as some of them are professional female free divers who dive into the deep sea to gather seafood.
The female divers' lives are not easy because it is very challenging to stop breathing for a long time or to go into the cold water especially in winter.
>> CORRECT
OR: The female divers' lives are tough because it is very risky to hold their breath for a long time or to go into the cold water especially in winter.
The last thing that I want to introduce about Jeju is a tangerine.
>> CORRECT
It is a round orange-colored fruit, which tastes sweet.
>> It is a round, orange-colored fruit, which tastes sweet.
It looks like a smaller version of an orange, but in my personal opinion, tangerines are much delicious that oranges.
>> It looks like a smaller version of an orange, but in my personal opinion, tangerines are much more delicious that oranges.
Tangerines trees are everywhere in Jeju. That's probably Jeju is a suitable place where tangerines grow well thanks to its warm weather.
>> Tangerine trees are everywhere in Jeju. 
That's probably Jeju is a suitable place where tangerines grow well thanks to its warm weather.
>> Probably, Jeju is a suitable place where tangerines grow well, so thanks to its warm weather.
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