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Dear Sir/Madam,

my name is Kiseok Lee.
I am writing to you because I would like to be considered for your job offering.

I like to travel and I have been to Australia for 2 years
and I have experience of taking care my nephew who is 9 years old.
and then, I was a chef in Korea, so I can make a heathy food for your family
even if you don't have a time to shop for family , I can go to shopping for your family, because
I have a international driver license
if it is possible to live with your family, it would be good experience for you and I

in addition, in my free time, i would like to learn English for communicate with your family,
and study about for cooking to make a heathy food for your family.

thank you for taking the time to lead my letter, if you have any further question, please don't hesitate to
contact me through my e-mail, which is 000@000.com

I very much look forward receiving your reply.

Respectfully,

Kiseok Lee.

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Good day Lee!

It is good to see you incorporating the correct punctuations and proper grammar forms here on this letter.

You have given all of the requirements of the task above, well done! You can further add that your experience of taking care of your nephew gave you an more ideas on how to handle kids and take care of them well.

For more input about this letter, see you later in class.

-T. Donna =)

Dear Sir/Madam,
>> Correct!

my name is Kiseok Lee.
I am writing to you because I would like to be considered for your job offering.
>> My name is Kiseok Lee.
I am writing you because I would like to be considered in your job offering.


I like to travel and I have been to Australia for 2 years
and I have experience of taking care my nephew who is 9 years old.
>>I like to travel and I have been to Australia for 2 years. I have experience in taking care of my nephew who is 9 years old.

and then, I was a chef in Korea, so I can make a heathy food for your family
even if you don't have a time to shop for family , I can go to shopping for your family, because
I have a international driver license
if it is possible to live with your family, it would be good experience for you and I
>> Moreover/ And then, I was a chef in Korea, so I can make healthy food for your family
even if you don't have a time to shop for them. I can go shopping for your family because
I have an international driver's license.
If it is possible to live with your family, it would be a good experience for you and I.


in addition, in my free time, i would like to learn English for communicate with your family,
and study about for cooking to make a heathy food for your family.
>> In addition, in my free time, I would like to learn English to communicate with your family
and study about cooking to make healthy food for your family.


thank you for taking the time to lead my letter, if you have any further question, please don't hesitate to
contact me through my e-mail, which is 000@000.com
>> Thank you for taking the time to read my letter. If you have any further question, please don't hesitate to
contact me through my e-mail, which is 000@000.com.


I very much look forward receiving your reply.
>> I very much look forward to receiving your reply.

Respectfully,
>> Correct!

Kiseok Lee
>> Correct!
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