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Theme: Make a sentence using the words below.
1. My family like punctual person because punctual person's inpression is good.
2. You can become good punctuality person when you do things on time.
3. The neutral colors are beige, black and shades of white.
4. I would prepare things for christmas. I can prepare christmas tree, gard, Etc.
5. Your cloth's color is shade of white.

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Here's your edited homework, Clair!
Just a reminder, avoid repeating the same word in a single sentence as much as possible. Look for synonyms or substitute like the way I taught you today. Check the corrections carefully below and you will know how to do it.^^

Cheers,
Jean~~


                   Make a sentence using the words below.

1. My family like punctual person because punctual person's inpression is good.
>> My family likes punctual people because they make a good impression. 

2. You can become good punctuality person when you do things on time.
>> You can become a better person when you practice punctuality. 
>> or: Punctuality makes you a better person. 

3. The neutral colors are beige, black and shades of white.
>> correct
>> or: I like neutral colors, such as beige, black and shades of white because they create a classic look.

4. I would prepare things for christmas. I can prepare christmas tree, gard, Etc.
>>  I would prepare things for Christmas. I can prepare a Christmas tree, card, etc.
>> or: I would prepare things for Christmas, such as a Christmas tree, card, and so on. 

5. Your cloth's color is shade of white.
>> Your clothes' color is a shade of white. 
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