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About freedom

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Let's take a look at the definition of 'freedom' before answering this question.
Freedom in the dictionary is said to be a state of being allowed to do what you want to do.
I've known that the human being has been given a 'freedom will' by GOD.
Having freedom will mean that I am being recognized by someone.
So freedom is very very important.
However, we need to know this and not be confused.
It is that 'freedom is not free.'
When we can practice justice in the society, won't it feel like a real freedom?

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Hi Eun Ha!
You did a great job for today.
The flow of the essay was very smooth.
It was very easy to read.
It's not common to see this kind of talent.
Hope you keep it up.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Let's take a look at the definition of 'freedom' before answering this question.
>> Correct
Freedom in the dictionary is said to be a state of being allowed to do what you want to do.
>> Correct
I've known that the human being has been given a 'freedom will' by GOD.
>> I've known that human beings have been given 'free will' by GOD.
Having freedom will mean that I am being recognized by someone.
>> Having free will means that I am being recognized by someone.
So freedom is very very important.
>> Correct
However, we need to know this and not be confused.
>> Correct
It is that 'freedom is not free.'
>> Correct
When we can practice justice in the society, won't it feel like a real freedom?
>> When we can practice justice in the society, won't it feel like real freedom?
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