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What springs to mind when you hear the term ¡®social networking¡¯?

: I always think SNS has pros and cons and they are always being issue. SNS makes people have online friends and express their personality. But there are so many problems in SNS. So, when I think those things, a lot of people on online are so rude and become bad people. For example, they do some bad words to one individual. I hope regulation to provide those things is made.

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Hello Matt! ^^

Thank you so much for answering your homework.
Have a great weekend! :)

~ T. Tricia

I always think SNS has pros and cons and they are always being issue.
>> I always think SNS has pros and cons and they are always being issues.

SNS makes people have online friends and express their personality.
>> SNS makes people have online friends and express their personalities.

But there are so many problems in SNS.
>> CORRECT!

So, when I think those things, a lot of people on online are so rude and become bad people.
>> So, when I think about those things, a lot of people online are so rude and become bad people.

For example, they do some bad words to one individual.
>> For example, they say some bad words to one individual.

I hope regulation to provide those things is made.
>> I hope there would be regulations to avoid those things to happen.
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