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What are the disadvantages of staying over?

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I think we have a few disadvantages for staying over.
First, when we go to another house, we need to take our stuff.
It's heavy to take our stuff, and we might have left our stuff at home.
Second, it is uncomfortable to stay over.
There might be other people in another house. If there's a lot of people,
we might feel uncomfortable.
Those are disadvantages for staying over. There is a few disadvantages of staying over, but I like to stay over because we can have fun!!

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Hello Jamie,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work! 

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)


What are the disadvantages of staying over?


I think we have a few disadvantages for staying over.
>>> CORRECT

First, when we go to another house, we need to take our stuff.
>>> CORRECT

It's heavy to take our stuff, and we might have left our stuff at home.
>>> It's heavy to take our stuff, and we might have left other stuff back home.

Second, it is uncomfortable to stay over.
>>> CORRECT

There might be other people in another house.
>>> There might be other people in the house where you're staying over. 

If there's a lot of people, we might feel uncomfortable.
>>> CORRECT

Those are disadvantages for staying over. 
>>> CORRECT

There is a few disadvantages of staying over, but I like to stay over because we can have fun!
>>> There are a few disadvantages of staying over, but I like to stay over because we can have fun!
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