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In summer, last year our class went to everland amusement park, because of trip at school. Our teacher made a team, because so many people are in my class. My team is 5 include me.
First, our team went to T-express. This roller coaster is very short, but so funny. because the road is very curvy and this roller coaster is on the mountain. I can see the whole of everland with this two eyes.
Second, we went to Gyro Drop. Gyro Drop is I go to high up, and drop in three second. When I drop, I feel I have no heart. This is very exciting, but very afraid.
I ride a lot, but the best was these two. This trip was very fun, and exciting. It was a best trip of my life.

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Happy Friday to you Maria!

I am so envious of the rides that you have had in Everland. If I were younger it would have been really fun being there joining you in those rides. When I tried being in a similar ride, I felt really scared and felt that my heart is separating from my body.

Anyway, thanks for sharing this fun and exciting experience at the amusement park. I hope you can go to one again when the Covid 19 is over.

See you next week!

-T. Donna =)

In summer, last year our class went to everland amusement park, because of trip at school. Our teacher made a team, because so many people are in my class. My team is 5 include me.
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Or: >> In summer last year, our class went to Everland Amusement Park because of trip at school. Our teacher made a team because so many people are in my class. My team is 5 including me.

First, our team went to T-express. This roller coaster is very short, but so funny. because the road is very curvy and this roller coaster is on the mountain. I can see the whole of everland with this two eyes.
>> First, our team went to T-Express. This roller coaster is very short but so funny because the road is very curvy and this roller coaster is on the mountain. I can see the whole of Everland with these two eyes.

Second, we went to Gyro Drop. Gyro Drop is I go to high up, and drop in three second. When I drop, I feel I have no heart. This is very exciting, but very afraid.
>> Second, we went to the Gyro Drop. Gyro Drop is going too high up, and dropping in three second. When I drop, I felt like I have no heart. This is very exciting, but I was very afraid.

I ride a lot, but the best was these two. This trip was very fun, and exciting. It was a best trip of my life.
>> I rode a lot, but the best was these two. This trip was very fun, and exciting. It was the best trip of my life.
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