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Hi there Eden~! ^^ Thank you for being active in class. Keep it up and you'd be able to improve your language skills. 
TEACHER GEMMA
I think It is more advantage.
>>> CORRECT
Because schoolchildren can learn the importance of like by raising animals and vegetables.
>>> Because schoolchildren can learn the importance of raising animals and vegetables.
Also, learn how to protect them.
>>> CORRECT
However It's not has advantages.
>>> However, it doesn't have advantages.
If die raising them, they can be shocked.
>>> If they die when raising them, they could be surprised.
But I think it is better to learn once, because there are more advantages.
>>> CORRECT
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