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In my opinion, the computer and the internet are greatest technological invention.

First, in virtue of computer, office works
Which are activities like making a report, drawing a picture, edit a video became very easy.

Second, the computer makes complicate calculation quickly

Third in virtue of the internet, we acquire information easily.
We can get real time news and we can sand a e-mail instead of a letter

Fourth, their are many convinent applications using internet like navigation, internet shopping, hotel reservation and e-book

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1. In my opinion, the computer and the internet are greatest technological invention.
>> In my opinion, the computer and the internet are the greatest technological inventions.

2. First, in virtue of computer, office works Which are activities like making a report, drawing a picture, edit a video became very easy.
>> First, computers make office works such as making reports, drawing pictures and editing videos very easy. 

3. Second, the computer makes complicate calculation quickly
>> Second, the computer helps people solve complicated calculations quickly.

4. Third in virtue of the internet, we acquire information easily.
>> Third, the internet makes us acquire information easily.

5. We can get real time news and we can sand a e-mail instead of a letter
>> We can get real time news and we can send e-mails instead of letters. 

6. Fourth, their are many convinent applications using internet like navigation, internet shopping, hotel reservation and e-book
>> Fourth, there are many convenient applications on the internet that we can use for navigation, online shopping, hotel reservations and e-books. 
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