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What are some unhealthy habits that you have?

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There are several bad habits that I have. Among them, the hardest one that I have tried fix is drinking coffee too many times.
When I wake up everymorning, my brain need a cup of coffee to start a day.
Also, after every meals, I want to drink a coffee again.
Sometimes, I felt pain in my stomach.
After helth check up, doctor advised me not to drink more than 1 cup of coffee in a day.
However, coffee time is not a just drink for me. It encourages me to be active in my life.

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Hi there Young Won!

Drinking coffee is one of the common vices of many people nowadays. I believe I am one of them too.

Drinking more water than coffee can be a good way to limit our coffee intake. As they always say when we drink liquor, "Drink moderately and responsibly." This goes too with coffee.

Thanks for drafting your answer very well.

See you in class!

-T. Donna =)

There are several bad habits that I have. Among them, the hardest one that I have tried fix is drinking coffee too many times.
>> Correct! 
Or: fix -> fixing
 
When I wake up everymorning, my brain need a cup of coffee to start a day.
>>When I wake up every morning, my brain needs a cup of coffee to start the day.

Also, after every meals, I want to drink a coffee again.
>> Correct!
Or: remove 'a'

Sometimes, I felt pain in my stomach.
>> Sometimes I feel pain in my stomach.

After helth check up, doctor advised me not to drink more than 1 cup of coffee in a day.
>> After my  health check up, the doctor advised me not to drink more than 1 cup of coffee in a day.

However, coffee time is not a just drink for me. It encourages me to be active in my life.
>> Correct!
Or: ...not just a drink...
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