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I graduated the agricultural high school which has curriculum about agriculture. My school is located in countryside so we have to learn how to grow vegetables and know about various animals. I remember that it was really difficult to memorize a lot of specious and name of plants. However, we have learnt that how to produce crops by doing practice in the farm. This is really helpful education for children but students have countless subjects they have to study these days. Especially, language and mathematics are the most important subjects for them. Students always feel the shortage of time because parents send them to various institute after school and then children need to do their homework until late night. Education system in Korea has serious problem that is gap between school and private institute curriculum. For example, first grade students in elementary school learn Korean alphabet but they study essay at private institute. As a result, most students are not focused on educat

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I graduated the agricultural high school which has curriculum about agriculture.
>>> I graduated agricultural in high school which has a curriculum about agriculture.
 My school is located in countryside so we have to learn how to grow vegetables and know about various animals. 
>>>  My school is located in ( the ) countryside so we have to learn how to grow vegetables and know about various animals. 
I remember that it was really difficult to memorize a lot of specious and name of plants.
>>> I remember that it was really difficult to memorize a lot of species and names of plants.
 However, we have learnt that how to produce crops by doing practice in the farm. 
>>>  However, we have learnt how to produce crops by practicing in the farm. 
This is really helpful education for children but students have countless subjects they have to study these days. 
>>> CORRECT
Especially, language and mathematics are the most important subjects for them. 
>>> CORRECT
Students always feel the shortage of time because parents send them to various institute after school and then children need to do their homework until late night.
>>> Students always lack time because parents send them to various institutes after school and then children need to do their homework until late night.
 Education system in Korea has serious problem that is gap between school and private institute curriculum.
>>>  Education system in Korea has a serious problem which is the gap between the school and the private institute curriculum.
 For example, first grade students in elementary school learn Korean alphabet but they study essay at private institute. 
>>>  For example, first grade students in elementary school learn Korean alphabets but they study essay in private institutes. 
As a result, most students are not focused on education...
>>> CORRECT
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