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What do you like buying in a convenience store? Why?

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I like to buy ramen in convenience store because I like spicy food.
My favorite ramen is Korean Spicy Noodle(ºÒ´ßººÀ½¸é).
It's so spicy but I like it. I also like to buy drinks.
There are Power Ade, Power O2, and 2%!!😀
I like convenience store food, but I like home-cooked meal more!!!!

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Hello Jamie,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

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What do you like buying in a convenience store? Why?

I like to buy ramen in convenience store because I like spicy food.
>>> I like to buy ramen in convenience stores because I like spicy food.

My favorite ramen is Korean Spicy Noodle(ºÒ´ßººÀ½¸é).
>>> CORRECT

It's so spicy but I like it. I also like to buy drinks.
>>> CORRECT
OR: It is so spicy but I like it and I also like to buy different kinds of drinks.

There are Power Ade, Power O2, and 2%!!😀
>>> There are Power Ade, Power O2, and etc. 

I like convenience store food, but I like home-cooked meal more!!!!
>>> I like foods in convenience stores, but I like home-cooked meals more!
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