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Baking As an Art

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I agree that making bread is an art. I think the most important factor that decides whether it is art or not is the creativity. In that, a person who makes the bread can boast his or her creativity. He or she can decide the ingredient and shape of the bread. For example, there are many popular bake shops that have their own récipes for the bread and obtain a patent for it. Also, in korea, there is a trend like vegan bread which doesn't use any butter or egg just like other arts. Therefore, I think making bread should be regarded as one particular kind of art.

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Good afternoon Min Ji! 
Yeah, I agree with you that baking is also an art for many different reasons.
Anyhow, thank you for sharing your answer! 

I agree that making bread is an art. 
>> CORRECT!
I think the most important factor that decides whether it is art or not is the creativity. 
>> CORRECT!
OR: I think creativity is the most important factor in determining whether it is art or not.
In that, a person who makes the bread can boast his or her creativity. 
>> CORRECT!
He or she can decide the ingredient and shape of the bread. 
>> He or she can decide the ingredients and shape of the bread.
For example, there are many popular bake shops that have their own récipes for the bread and obtain a patent for it. 
>> For example, there are many popular bakeries that have their own recipes for bread and have obtained patents.
Also, in Korea, there is a trend like vegan bread which doesn't use any butter or egg just like other arts. 
>> CORRECT!
Therefore, I think making bread should be regarded as one particular kind of art.
>> CORRECT! 
OR: Therefore, I think making bread should be considered a special art.
 

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