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What do you like doing when it is raining? Explain why

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I like cooking Kimchi pancake when rainy day.
because, korea has a custom of eating Kimchi pancake with makgeolli when rainy day.
and I like that food.
especially, I ilke KImchi pancake's edge. Its texture of food is crispy.

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What do you like doing when it is raining? Explain why


I like cooking Kimchi pancake when rainy day.
>>> I like cooking Kimchi pancake when it's raining. 

because, korea has a custom of eating Kimchi pancake with makgeolli when rainy day.
and I like that food.
>>> In Korea we have a custom of eating Kimchi pancake with makgeolli when it's a rainy day. Another reason why I cook kimchi pancake is because I like it.


especially, I ilke KImchi pancake's edge. Its texture of food is crispy.
>>> I especially like the kimchi pancakes' edge. I like its crispy texture so much. 
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