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Ofcourse, I want to go to party with friends.
But I think I don¡¯t need drinks because I¡¯m weak at drinking.
I like party with friends but I never have been to party like America.
So I want to go to party with only friends

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Good evening Jun!

This time I was able to read this. Well, who is a high school who doesn't want to party? Young people love to party and even if we grow older we still party.

Nonetheless, party responsibly and drink moderately.

Thanks for all of your written work.

Hope this won't be the last.

See you, thank you!

-T. Donna =)

Ofcourse, I want to go to party with friends.
>> Correct!
Or: Space between "Of" and "course"

But I think I don¡¯t need drinks because I¡¯m weak at drinking.
>> Correct!

I like party with friends but I never have been to party like America.
>> I like partying with friends but I have never had to party like in America.

So I want to go to party with only friends.
>> Correct!
Or: ...with friends only.
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