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What was the most marvelous place that you have been to?

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The most marvelous place where I have been to is Quebec city.
While I was living in Montreal, I visited Quebec city more than three times.
Quebec city is far from Montreal about three and half hours by driving. There were many historical heritages that remained in its original state used to be in ling time ago.
Chateau Frontenac Hotel is one of those beautiful places, which I slept in there in November 2014. I couldn't forget many things such as cute gift ahops, cafes and roads made by stones around the hotel.
It's sky was deep blue and every stuff's colors were vivid. Quebec city is beauty in itself.
Someday I will visit there and stay at Chateau Frontenac as long as possoble.

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Nice to see you here Young Won!

Truly a marvelous place, even if I haven't been in the city of Quebec, I get a very good glimpse of how it looks like here on your composition.

In addition, the hotel seems grandiose and fit for a queen.

I can see that your grammar has drastically improved in a few weeks. You are doing fast progress in grammar, well done!

Thanks for this composition. Keep writing!

-T. Donna =)

The most marvelous place where I have been to is Quebec city.
>> Correct!

While I was living in Montreal, I visited Quebec city more than three times.
>> Correct!
Or: Quebec City

Quebec city is far from Montreal about three and half hours by driving. There were many historical heritages that remained in its original state used to be in ling time ago.
>> ...There were many historical heritages that remained in its original state that used to be from a long time ago.

Chateau Frontenac Hotel is one of those beautiful places, which I slept in there in November 2014. I couldn't forget many things such as cute gift ahops, cafes and roads made by stones around the hotel.
>> Chateau Frontenac Hotel is one of those beautiful places, which I slept in on November 2014. I couldn't forget many things there such as cute gift shops, cafes and roads made by stones around the hotel.

It's sky was deep blue and every stuff's colors were vivid. Quebec city is beauty in itself.

Someday I will visit there and stay at Chateau Frontenac as long as possoble.
>> It's sky was deep blue and every stuff's color was vivid. Quebec City is a beauty in itself.
Someday I will visit there and stay at the Chateau Frontenac as long as possible. 
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