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I think uploading knowledge to the internet is more effective than writing knowledge in the book.
Of course, knowledge in the book is needed for anyone who want to study one part deeply.
But, nowadays, a world changes fast. Accordingly, knowledge also change fast.
Especially, knowledge related to an IT change so fast.
For example, any book that related to IT and published in 2015 is not effective in 2021.
Accordingly, most books used in a university are edited and reissued once every two years.
In conclusion, I think knowledge uploaded to the internet is needed and have many advantages than disadvantages.

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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think uploading knowledge to the internet is more effective than writing knowledge in the book.
>>> CORRECT
Of course, knowledge in the book is needed for anyone who want to study one part deeply.
>>> Of course, knowledge in the book is necessary for anyone who wants to study one part deeply.
But, nowadays, a world changes fast. 
>>> But, nowadays, the world is changing so fast. 
Accordingly, knowledge also change fast.
>>> Accordingly, knowledge also changes fast.
Especially, knowledge related to an IT change so fast.
>>> Especially, the knowledge which is related to IT.
For example, any book that related to IT and published in 2015 is not effective in 2021.
>>> For example, some books which were related to IT and published in 2015 is no longer effective in 2021.
Accordingly, most books used in universities are edited and reissued once every two years.
>>> CORRECT
In conclusion, I think knowledge uploaded to the internet is needed and have many advantages than disadvantages.
>>> In conclusion, I think knowledge uploaded on the internet is necessary and has many advantages than disadvantages.
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