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I think the disadvantages is bigger than advantages.
It is convenient to find knowledge easily on the internet.
What you can find anywhere is also an advantage.
However, there is a lot of wrong knowledge on the Internet.
It can cause misunderstanding by mistaking the wrong knowledge for the right way.
Therefore when you get knowledge from the Internet, you should look for it carefully.

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GOOD DAY EDEN~! ^^
The best way to not feel hopeless is to get up and do something. Don¡¯t wait for good things to happen to you. If you go out and make some good things happen, you will fill the world with hope, you will fill yourself with hope.
If you wish to do something that the average person won¡¯t do, you need to work harder than the average person is willing to work.
Shake things up today!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think the disadvantages is bigger than advantages.
>>> I think there are more of disadvantages than advantages.
It is convenient to find knowledge easily on the internet.
>>> CORRECT
What you can find anywhere is also an advantage.
>>> What you can find anywhere is also an advantage.
However, there is a lot of wrong knowledge on the Internet.
>>> However, there is a lot of misinformation on the Internet.
It can cause misunderstanding by mistaking the wrong knowledge for the right way.
>>> It could cause misunderstanding by recognizing the wrong information to be right. 
Therefore when you get knowledge from the Internet, you should look for it carefully.
>>> Therefore, when you get an information from the Internet, you should check it carefully.
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